The essay has a
good flow as can be seen in the way the different paragraphs connect
harmoniously. Ideas are not scattered all over but they are rather arranged
chronologically and systematically which makes the essay to be not only easy to
read but also easy to comprehend. The writer introduces the main idea in the
first paragraph and keeps it as the main pivot throughout the entire essay. One
particular point that really grasped my attention is the point where the author
talks about the side effects of urban sprawl on the city dwellers. I thought it
to be interesting since I would have expected that the urban sprawl concept
would affect the suburb dwellers more than the city dwellers a notion that is
negated by the essay.
The
essay however lost its effect at the point where the author began talking about
the history of the urban sprawl. He not only chose the wrong place to talk
about the history of urban sprawl (he should have talked about it at the
(beginning), but he also should have spend less time giving the Nitty Gritty of
the history and concentrate more on the effects of urban sprawl. However, the
thesis of the essay is strong and on a scale of five, the thesis would score at
least four. The thesis is captivating and the reader is eager to find out how
the problem of urban sprawl is highlighted in the document.
This
essay uses effective transitions of the paragraphs using two techniques.
Firstly the relevant connectors are used and the ideas are laid out in a
sequential manner. The essay does not build upon any logical fallacies choosing
rather to base on factual realities some based on empirical findings. The
writer would however make the essay more robust by living out the part of the
history of urban sprawl and concentrating more on the effects of the urban
sprawl phenomena. In order to make the essay even more effective, the writer
should have included some real examples of events, peoples or lifestyles that
have adversely been affected by the urban sprawl phenomena. One of the strength
of the essay which is no doubt the greatest lesson I have learnt from the essay
is the sequential connection of ideas in paragraphs which made the essay very interesting
and captivating to read.
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